Dear Dad....

[Kamikaze_Jen]

Hey everyone, looks like the writing forum got crashed and it lost my poem. (probably lost in a dark hole, simulation: noooooo *splat*) Anyway, I'm going to post it again so everyone can enjoy it again.

Dear Dad,
Since you died
Nothing has been right
I've been thinking about you everyday and night
when you used to hold me
and when you used to scold me
but also play with me
Then out of nowhere times have changed
And things have been rearranged
We can't see your grave anymore
Like we used to before.
Now I am 12
in 7th grade with a new life
without one more fight
into your memories of the last light
we were together with love and might
and before you died you hugged me tight
now I ask you..
Will you hold me again?
I love you so
and I love you with my Soul
Our love will never be as black as coal.
I hold you tight in my memories
with all my might defeated the pain with one melody
Will you hold me?
I have to leave now before but before we go
I'm sorry that I can't see you anymore
I love you
Jen

(Lots and Lots of BBCODE!)
- Jen

[$MiLe$!=)]

aww...It's such a sweet poem.

[Lavendre]

*tear* Its sincerity and emotion come from the simplicity; not like most poets I've read recently, who kind of choke on lines that are too big for them.

Erm, if that makes any sense... but this poem was very moving to me. I especially appreciate the transition of how the narrator perceives the father, at first from his violent side, to the loving side he/she misses. Thank you for sharing it.

[Sakurairo]

Oh, that's lovely!
I agree with Lavendre on it's simplicity. Sometimes simplicity is the best way to express yourself, ne?